Board Thread:Fun and Games/@comment-29980193-20200316015545/@comment-71.255.116.68-20200325022313

Proofreading session that mostly turned into another case of What's The Joke™:

Not a proofread, but what's Ajit's comments about Solrock referencing?

I get the reference in Doug's quote against Animdude but what's with the odd phrasing, I don't get the reference.

Cirno's name is misspelled in ZUN's vs Weiss quote

What's DDD vs against Jaelmo referencing? Just curious. Vice versa as well.

Isn't DD's quote against Animdude a comment from an M&M song? I know the "Hi kid, you like violence" part is, but considering it's Animdude I'm guessing it's referencing a FNaF song?

I know you didn't make it Sakura so; Hey Bart/Tony, what's Adam's quote against Wolfy referencing? Seems like song lyrics, but I don't get the comment about "your people" I know it probably has to do with furries though.

Datf Punk's vs quote against Money and Mischief has confused me for ages, what's it referencing?

HOBaRT's vs quote against Animdude is kinda of awkwardly worded. Suggestion for replacement: * H E A T I N G C H E E S E* (there is a move in FNaF World called Hot Cheese)

Proper font for donk, you're welcome in advance for copy-paste: ｂｅｇｏｎｅ ｂｏｏｍｅｒ

Funny 7's vs for Chara is a bit outdated as I thought we were scripting them to say ONLY what and seven, but I can't come up with a better parenthesed quote at the moment.

Speaking of Krist, Joel played this clip on his Doom Eternal stream and it is geniunely perfect as a reply to Jazz Cats considering their whole thing is that they're college students. (aside from the mighty donk of course) Victory quote plz, probably just cut out the gay part. XD

Ayano's vs against Adam is too peppy as stated before, she's pretty sinister and emotionless, that's her thing. Suggested replacement quotes: This love is mine and mine alone. OR I refuse to break in front of you. Break you, perhaps. (This Love lyrics)

Bipper's vs against HwtM. dat true though And Wirt and Morty and Connie and Zach and Ben and Gwen... and then you have the Ninjago and Digimon characters... (But mainly Wirt and Mort GOTTA be mentioned, they're like half the Big Four, Beast Wirt is from a special CN made with a cult fanbase Over the Garden Wall but after accepting the main villain, The Beast's offer and not saving his brother. Evil Morty is.... Evil Morty I think like everyone here knows about him due to the Damaged Code meme by now, he aside from some of the later characters and Genocide!Frisk is the only canonical BEF aside from Ice!Finn)

The entire point of the Scottish Trainer memes was her extremely diverse and complex range of insults, so far literally 3/4 is just the c-word, which while accurate give it some v a r i e t y ya deick! (but they're good though, Off the Hook's is accurate as hell, suggesting deyck (dick with Scottish accent) or fooken dipshite for Adam for that spice n variety)

Hardware store should probably be uncapitalized, to make the reference less blatantly obvious.

Deltarune needs to be capitalized.

Maybe change "Your appearance now" to "Your new appearance", makes it easier to read and better flow of the sentence, or at least for me.

It's Mr. Worldwide, unless that's intentional or a reference I don't know.

Thanos' Scourge Sisters quote was actually reffering Bec Noir, not Jack Noir, my bad, thought it sounded better and it wasn't that much of a problem to me personally, but after seeing somebody in the comments of Bec Noir's second arrangement in Temporary Flight Attendent says how Bec Noir and "the leader of the Midnight Crew" aren't the same guy, I remembered just how nitpicky a lot of Homestuck fans are due to how complex the lore is.

Again Dedede's victory against Elmo seems pretty generic and more like something you would say Sakura, so unless it's a direct quote to their shared reference yeet, that's just my opinion though.

Won't not wouldn't in snake's vs quote for James, present and past tense and all that. Again just a minor nitpick, but I'm here to proofread and make it more high-quality if this is gonna be a legit thing.

It's Mashup Week, not Mash-Up Week, but I get it since you didn't follow it. Still feel like it should be changed to a Lemon Demon reference, suggested optional replacement like Ayano's: [Obtained Mask of Your Own Face! You look into it's eyeholes and see a rather handsome robot looking back at you.] (Reference to the song Mask of My Own Face and paraphrasing a lyric) OR [Obtained Mask of Your Own Face! It's... rather creepy actually and you'd rather not put it on.]

I know it's Bart's fault by y you gotta do my boy Dave like this Too jokey a quote for Quote, suggested replacement: [Obtained the Sunflower! It brings back some rather unpleasant memories.] (Reference to the plot important red flowers in Cave Story.)

The pipe isn't some generic one, the distinctive type of pipe traditionally associated with Sherlock Holmes is actually called a calabash pipe, since it was made from being made out of gourds, giving it it's iconic smooth, curved appearance.

Mothman's victory against Nintenbros isn't blunt enough, he doesn't really use stuff like "the" and he doesn't use "I" either, just a little writing tip for y'all. Reccomended quote fix: Human still worst Smash player me ever see.

Not a proofread or nitpick, but I looked up Chiaki's reference in her quote against Batter and god damn you're actually pretty on the nose about Batter's character Sakura. "Another interesting fact is the majority of the people who became Ultimate Despair have their eyes turn gray spirals, red or crimson." Well, none of it is canon due to how ambigious his eyes look in his talksprite, but consideringa lot of fan art of Batter...  that and being a person who focuses on spreading Despair are actually pretty on point.

More Ayano quote adjustment, can't think of any for Adam, but just replace the exclaimation point on Krist's (yes I know Bart wrote it, not you) and make it italic for inner narration and yah, you're good.

Bel-Air has a hyphen, again, minisule nitpick I know.

S A N S U N D E R T A L E for proper meme name (Yes I know Bart wrote all of Krist's stuff)

Again the asterisks on Chara's comments are optional, but we need to make up our mind on them and have every one of their quotes begin with one, or just remove them altogether.

Also Chara's victory against Bipper is missing the word may,  but that's my fault for not proofreading shit, and then you copy-pasting my messed-up comment. "and I may also be"

Optional but bold "that" in Bipper's victory against Jaelmo, gives it more oomph™ and sass, has more kick to it, fitting his nature.

Too hards a bit better than so hard in Animdude's victory against Daft Punk, may just be me though.

Again apologies for the big-ass wall of text analysis and nitpicking of everything the quotes we have are actually pretty good I think! Mostly Sakura's contributions and I'm not just flattering you because you're project leader. ;3 I'm probably gonna go to bed soon, but I'll probably read the response to all this in like an hour or two or maybe tomorrow morning. Peace out